Isabel Allende once said "Heart is what drive and determines our fate".This means the heart is what tell us what to do and which way to take. This quote is entirely true, because even though, common sense is what let us think clearly what would be better for us, but heart is what decides what to do anyways. This can clearly seen in Breaking Night in Liz Murray's life. Who every day is fighting with her feelings about what to do when her mind and her heart are giving her different choices. Do not give up your dream just because what people say about you, only do what your heart tell you, and let your dreams become a reality as Liz Murray who did no matter where she came from and what people said about her she could achieve her dreams.
You're sentencing is amazing, clearly readable, and correctly written. All of the sentences follow the sequence and the structure. You don't use 1st person, which is great. I loved how you stated the 3 main points, not to give up on your dreams, do what your heart wants to do and let your dreams be reality. I really appreciate how you wrote this. Keep up the great work! -Chamy
ReplyDeleteYou had a very good opening sentence and I could clearly understand all your sentences. You follow the sequence very well. You did not use "I", which is very good. Your points were; do not give up your dream just because of what people think, do what you heart tells you to, and let your dreams become a reality. I think this piece of writing is very nice, yet you are missing some letters at the end of your words. With that being said, your writing would be perfect without those mistakes.
ReplyDeleteAll your sentences are able to be read clearly. I like how all your sentences fall in place. They go with what you are saying. You didn't use first person, so that's good. I didn't get if you had three points. So I suggest that you have three points for fate.
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